TONE
How do authors convey tone or attitude in writing?
For this week's blog you will be reading passages and identifying the tone.
Step One:
Reread the following to identify the tone of each passage:
"Real Women, Real Beauty" by Moana Uluave and
"Intelligence in the Internet age"by Stefanie Olsen
Step Two:
Answer This Prompt: What clues in the prose help us determine the tone of the passage. Cite specific examples from the passage that convey the tone.
Step Three:
Read the responses of two other peers. Do you agree or disagree with their claims? Explain your response. Due Date: Monday, November 4th. Worth 50 points for your response and comment to two students.
In “Real Women, Real Beauty” by Moana Uluave, the importance of self-worth and confidence is stressed. Uluave uses her diction to convey an urgent tone. She says “I recognized beautiful Pacific Islander women stripping themselves of their inherited ethnic characteristics and eagerly adopting the majority ideals of beauty…” When using the phrase “stripping themselves”, Uluave really emphasizes that young women of Pacific Islander descent have tried to completely change who they are. She also uses phrases like ‘biting remarks” and “the bitterness of ugliness” to show that being teased for being Tongan hurt her emotionally.
ReplyDelete“Pride” by Dagoberto Gilb gives one an inside look at what it feels like to be a proud man, but in a good way. Gilb uses personification to make a person imagine pride in a new way. “Pride hears gritty dirt...sees the sunlight...smells a sweet, musky, drizzle of rain…” Gilb makes pride seem tangible, and one can tell that he wanted to make pride real. He also compares pride to art and war by saying “pride is working a job like it’s as important as art or war.” This makes you feel that the kind of pride he feels is very powerful and real.
Stefanie Olson wrote “Intelligence in the Internet Age” to explain how we, as humans, have relied less on memory and more on technology. She uses a mix of logos and ethos to explain that “...terabytes of easily accesses data...are profoundly changing the way people gather information.” Her tone is urgent, as if she wants us to stop relying so heavily on computers and the internet for our information.
Bryson Baligad
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Dear Bryson,
DeleteI agree with you that in "Pride" Gilb does give you a look at what it's like to be a proud man. I also think that his sense of pride is very powerful and real. I can feel his sense of pride, and it shows in his writing that he wants others to feel the pride he is talking about.I agree with your write up good job!
Dear Bryson,
DeleteI think you nailed the tone of "Real Woman, Real Beauty" right on the button. I felt the same tone as I reviewed the piece and noticed the same clues.
Sincerely,
Colby Sargent
Dear Bryson,
DeleteYour analysis of the tone of "Real women, Real beauty" was magnificent. When I read the passage I didn't quite catch on to the urgency in her tone, but I did sense confidence, as well as the bitterness she built up from the remarks of people in the past. Great job.
Sincerely,
Autumn Begley
Dear Bryson,
DeleteI thought that the tone of the passage "Intelligence in the internet age" was mostly based off of how we rely on the internet and whether that benefits us or not too. I really like that you gave the specific examples of Logos and Ethos used in her piece, I didn't even notice until I read your response. Good Job!
Sincerely,
Malia Hickey
Inquisitive, bold, and appreciative. These are the Tones Olsen, Uluave, and Gilb proclaim their messages with. Their voices so deeply convoluted with the tone each chose that it serenades each work entirely.
ReplyDeleteIn "Intelligence in the Internet age", six question marks scatter through the page long writing. This a considerable amount, but what is more suggestive of Olsen's tone, is her repeated comparison of two ideas in which the reader must analyze which approach is more valuable. Did the written language make people smarter or dumber thousands of years ago? Does knowing how to do something manually, but less efficiently, make you smarter than someone who can use a highly accurate computer program? "Memory, is the mother of all wisdom." Olsen quotes, but immediately follows with another quote "Today, memory is more irrelevant than ever, argue some academics." From start to finish, the author uses a series of questions and contradictory statements to create an inquisitive tone.
Bold. "The tabloids bold print pulls in every desperate housewife longing for a body like Eva Longoria." This excerpt from Uluave's introductory sentence is intensely bold, and slightly sarcastic setting the tone for her article. Eva Longoria was the star of the long running "Desperate Housewives" TV show, the medias icon of a beautiful wife, torturing real wives green with envy over why they can't look like her. Uluave uses powerful comparisons of the rates of anorexia and suicide, to women on the covers of magazines. Ugliness to race. The media to Hitler. Her statements are shocking. Bold.
We surely are grateful for the things that we are proud of. Pride fills you up when you feel empty, picks your chin up and adds a few feet to your height. You feel big and you feel good. Because the topic of Gilb's essay is pride, his tone rings with gratitude. The assistant manager grateful for his job, the boy grateful for his high score, the young women grateful for her new dress. Grateful to be able to take care of yourself finally, grateful that your child has overcome the hardships of high school, and before you knew it, is graduating. "Pride- eats huevos con chile in corn tortillas" Gilb's writes. "the love of herritage." The appreciation that its yours.
Through each of these tones, inquisitive, bold, and appreciative, the authors are able to effectively convey their messages. The tones were more than essential to each paper- they were the paper. They were the engine of the car that drove the message home. And after all, without and engine, what is a car?
Inquisitive, bold, and appreciative. These are the Tones Olsen, Uluave, and Gilb proclaim their messages with. Their voices so deeply convoluted with the tone each chose that it serenades each work entirely.
DeleteIn "Intelligence in the Internet age", six question marks scatter through the page long writing. This a considerable amount, but what is more suggestive of Olsen's tone, is her repeated comparison of two ideas in which the reader must analyze which approach is more valuable. Did the written language make people smarter or dumber thousands of years ago? Does knowing how to do something manually, but less efficiently, make you smarter than someone who can use a highly accurate computer program? "Memory, is the mother of all wisdom." Olsen quotes, but immediately follows with another quote "Today, memory is more irrelevant than ever, argue some academics." From start to finish, the author uses a series of questions and contradictory statements to create an inquisitive tone.
Bold. "The tabloids bold print pulls in every desperate housewife longing for a body like Eva Longoria." This excerpt from Uluave's introductory sentence is intensely bold, and slightly sarcastic setting the tone for her article. Eva Longoria was the star of the long running "Desperate Housewives" TV show, the medias icon of a beautiful wife, torturing real wives green with envy over why they can't look like her. Uluave uses powerful comparisons of the rates of anorexia and suicide, to women on the covers of magazines. Ugliness to race. The media to Hitler. Her statements are shocking. Bold.
We surely are grateful for the things that we are proud of. Pride fills you up when you feel empty, picks your chin up and adds a few feet to your height. You feel big and you feel good. Because the topic of Gilb's essay is pride, his tone rings with gratitude. The assistant manager grateful for his job, the boy grateful for his high score, the young women grateful for her new dress. Grateful to be able to take care of yourself finally, grateful that your child has overcome the hardships of high school, and before you knew it, is graduating. "Pride- eats huevos con chile in corn tortillas" Gilb's writes. "the love of herritage." The appreciation that its yours.
Through each of these tones, inquisitive, bold, and appreciative, the authors are able to effectively convey their messages. The tones were more than essential to each paper- they were the paper. They were the engine of the car that drove the message home. And after all, without and engine, what is a car?
Zuri Shanklin
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DeleteDear Zuri,
DeleteI like how for the passage "Pride", rather than just stating the obvious and saying that he was proud, you went one step further to say he was appreciative. Also I completely agree with you on the fact that Stefanie Olson had an inquisitive tone, because throughout the passage she would ask questions, and in my opinion she never quite had a solid answer. She mostly gave examples to what the answer could be. All in all you had an excellent analysis.
Sincerely,
Autumn Begley
Dear Zuri,
DeleteMy favorite part of your post was how every paragraph began with something other than just stating what the tone of each passage was. I also liked the very beginning of your post where you stated the tones before the passages. This added to your post as a whole and along with your great analysis made an interesting read
Sincerely,
Mason Schwarze
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DeleteDear Zuri,
DeleteWhen I'm not inspired to read, I always go through your essays and they always manage to help me out. I really enjoyed reading the Pride part because you made it seem relatable and each sentence fit each other perfectly.I can really see the effort that was put in your work and it makes reading your responses more interesting.
John Ortega
HOPES
Dear Zuri,
DeleteI agree on several points throughout your essay, most pointedly the part where you classified the tone of the "Real Women, Real Beauty" as a bold one, which helped me determine my own opinion of it in my essay. I especially enjoyed the ending line, which was a humorous analogy and helped to end the essay on a positive note and make it stick in the readers end for a longer length of time then it would have otherwise.
Ryemin Liddle
HOPES
In “Intelligence in the Internet age”, Stefanie Olsen pulls the reader in with a questioning tone. In this article, Olsen talks about some views on intelligence. Her article is focused around two questions she presents in the second paragraph, “Is technology making us smarter? Or are we lazily reliant on computers, and, well, dumber than we used to be?” . She doesn't merely agree or disagree with the two questions throughout her piece, but instead questions whether which one could be right or wrong. She does this by adding a series of questions throughout her whole article.
ReplyDeleteIn “ Real Women, Real Beauty”, Moana Uluave presents a strikingly forward tone. At first Uluave talks about how many people are consumed by this definition of what beauty is. In the first paragraph she states, “Yet when I see the weight obsessed women draped across the covers, the rising rates of anorexia and suicide come to my mind”. Moanas straight forward tone expresses how strongly she feels about the subject of defining beauty. Also, in the forth paragraph she explains in a very forward matter how this world was making her become something that she was not.
In the last article “Pride”, Dagoberto Gilb uses an appreciative tone in his article. He talks about small things that give people a sense of pride, and how they are appreciative of it. Whether it's a lady buying a new black dress and shoes or working a job like its as important as art or war. Gilb conveys an appreciative tone throughout his piece.
Even though these authors used different tones in their articles, they were able to each get across their points to the reader.
Haylei Sheldon
IDEAS
Dear Haylei,
DeleteI feel the same way about the tone of "Intelligence in the Internet Age". Olsen didn't seem like she had a certain one-sided stance on the subject and dedicated most of the piece to debating rather than defending.
Sincerely,
Colby
Dear Haylei,
DeleteI really like the way you choose to portray the tone of the passage Intelligence in the Internet age by Stefanie Olsen. You highlighted something that I am sure a lot of us noticed as we were reading this passage. It helped keep us interested and made for a more balanced argument because it wash't extremely one sided. You also stated the fat that Olsen used a lot of questions which I also identifies in my blog post.
Sincerely,
Wylie Barker
IDEAS
Dear Haylei,
DeleteI found your essay to be a thoroughly enjoyable read, and I found myself agreeing with you on several observations regarding the passages tone, and the first paragraph on "Intelligence in the Internet Age" helped me find the correct wording for my own piece, so you have my thanks for that.
Sincerely,
Ryemin Liddle
HOPES
“Real women, Real beauty” by Moana Uluave gives a much more bolder and straight to the point kind of tone. She defines beauty and how people see it and strive to be to. Moana gives a statement, “Yet when I see the weight obsessed women draped across the covers, the rising rate of anorexia comes to my mind.” She goes straight forward about the way she see beauty and how other people should see beauty. All people need to know is that, you’re beautiful in your own way, and should not let other people bring you down on the flaws they see. In the end all that matters is your own opinion.
ReplyDeleteThe passage “pride” by Dagoberto Gilb makes the reader think and feel what a human being should feel like. Giving that reader a new perspective on how to see their life and not how others see it. Gilb uses personification to give the reader that sense of image in their head about pride. Gilb wants to show the reader that pride is real if you want it to be there. “Pride hears gritty dirt, sees the sunlight, smells a sweet, musky, dazzle of rain.” This is a clear example of Gilb giving a pride a real meaning.
In the passage, “Intelligence in the internet age” Stefanie Olson describe how us humans rely more on technology than our own memory. In the second paragraph in, she says, “ Is technology making us smart? Or have we become lazy to have computers, basically being dumber that how we were in the past?” She points out wether or not this statement is right or wrong, true or false, agree or disagree.
Respectfully
Kristian Sablay
Hopes
Dear Kristian,
DeleteIn the writing "pride" I also agree that Gilb makes the reader feel what a human being should feel like. He makes you feel that sense of pride that everyone should have, no matter whats its about. I strongly agree with you that Gilb gives you that image in your head about pride. I feel the same way. Good Job!
Respectfully
Chaz Pacleb
Dear Kristian,
DeleteI agree with the tone you chose to describe " Real Women, Real Beauty". She was very straight forward in her article, whether it was her describing the tabloids or references to Hitler, she was very bold in her statements.
Sincerely,
Haylei Sheldon
IDEAS
Dear Kristian,
DeleteI totally agree with your paragraph on "pride." I used the same quote but came away with a different tone. It just goes to show that everyone perceives the writing differently. Even though I had a different take on it originally, I still agree with yours. Good job!
Sincerely,
Matthew Steinohrt
In “Pride” by Dagoberto Gilb shows what it is like to feel a sense of pride and how, in many ways it can be shown and expressed. Gilb displays a pride filled tone, and what pride means to him. Describing pride as “the happiness of a new high score on a video arcade game, of a pretty new black dress and shoes”. Gilb then goes on to explain pride, in a more complex way. He states “pride hears gritty dirt blowing..”pride sees the sunlight..”pride smells a sweet musky drizzle of rain” to explain that pride is displayed and expressed in so many ways that there is no real definition of pride because it comes from inside and is expressed differently in everyone.
ReplyDeleteIn “Intelligence in the Internet age” by Stefanie Olsen speaks of intelligence and its relation to the “internet age” with an overall inquisitive tone. In the second paragraph Olsen ask us, the general 20th century reader, “Is technology making us smarter?’. This question asked by Olsen opens up the topic for further discussion, as then goes on to answer the question. Olsen ask us, the readers, many probing questions and brings up controversial arguments. The questions in Olsens prose bring together different sides on the topic and makes the reader involved in the topic. Overall Olsen wants us to know that the internet age does not determine your intelligence, it is our “ability to adapt and learn”.
In “Real Women, Real Beauty” by Moana Uluave, she speaks of her experiences as a tongan woman and her own definition of beauty. Uulave draws us in with her pride filled tone by speaking of her personal experiences as a Tongan woman. She states “for the first time I saw beauty in my Tongeness” and goes on to elaborate about why. In the last paragraph she closes by saying “I want my children to look Tongan and their children and their children’s children, like their ancestors did” showing pride in herself and inheritance. This one passage overall displayed Uluave’s tone of pride about her Tongan inheritance, and also herself as a beautiful Tongan woman.
Aaryn Gray
IDEAS
Dear Aaryn,
DeleteI completely agree with your thoughts on the tone in 'Intelligence in the internet age". I wrote also about how the author mostly debates the topic. I like how you included what you felt she thought about the topic at the end because I couldnt figure out how she felt. Good job!
Sincerely, Megan Devin
Dear Aaryn,
DeleteOur responses has a lot in common and we both picked up on similar tones the author was using. It was really interesting to read about your writing on the "Real Women, Real Beauty" because I too talked about the future generations and I didnʻt see anyone elseʻs like that. Wonderful response
From,
Marina Mireles
In “Pride” Dagoberto Gilb shows and explains what it is like to have and to feel a sense of pride. He explains what pride means to him. He states pride is like a working job like it’s as important as art of war. His tone in this short story is a straight forward explanation on how much pride he has for his family and heritage. His tone is full of joy and happiness. He begins to define pride in a more elaborate way. He says Pride is the deaf and blind confidence of the good people who are too poor but don’t notice. I think Gilb is trying to say that everyone has pride in what they believe in but only some notice it. I believe he has a joyful and pride filled tone in his writing.
ReplyDeleteIn “Real Women, Real Beauty” Moana Uluave tells us about her experiences as a tongan women. About how she is put down and told what to do about her looks. At first she believes what everyone is saying and does what she is told. But then she realizes that everyone has their own type of beauty. We all just show it in different ways. I believe that Uluave writes with a tone of pride and confidence. She states that she is proud of her Tongeness and sees beauty in it. She has a very confident tone in her story.
In “Intelligence in the Internet age” Stefanie Olsen asks us “Is technology making us smarter?” I believe that she is trying to tell us that only the truly intelligent people become smarter by using the internet. She uses a strong informative tone. She is trying to inform us and get across to us that the internet does not make us smarter, it’s our ability to adapt and learn the things you see off the internet. The internet is just a resource to make us smarter, only few actually apply it. She has a strong convincing tone in her writing.
Chaz Pacleb
Hopes
Dear Chaz,
DeleteI agree 100% with your assessment of “Intelligence in the Internet age”.
I also agree that the internet is a tool that should be used wisely. The problem is some people use it as a crutch which does not help them learn. Do you ever find yourself using the internet as a crutch? I know I do.
Sincerely,
Victor Sanchez
Dear Chaz,
DeleteI totally agree with you that "Real Woman, Real Beauty" had a tone of pride and confidence. And the way Uluave spoke of her Tongan inheritance really showed it. Overall, I really enjoyed reading your essay, good job!
Sincerely,
Aaryn Gray
Dear Chaz,
DeleteI fully agree with your answer to the article of "intelligence in the internet age". Its like when people need to use their brain, then end up using the internet instead of what they know in their head. We should use the internet appropriately. I am one of those people that does this once in a while at the same tome, trying to resist the urge to use it when it is unnecessary. Great Job this week, keep it up!
Respectfully
Kristian Sablay
“Real Women, Real Beauty”
ReplyDeleteIn “Real Woman, Real Beauty”, Moana Uluave expresses a disapproving and somewhat resentful tone. She mentions relating modern magazine covers to “rising rates of teenage anorexia and suicide” in the first paragraph, giving the start of the essay its sour feeling. In the second paragraph Uluave uses anecdotes from her childhood recounting spiteful memories of her “ugliness”.
“Pride”
In “Pride”, the tone can be felt through the author’s use of diction and similes. Dagoberto Gilb uses a heaping assortment of words to convey a deep meaningful tone. In the first paragraph, Gilb begins with the simile “it is so dark that it is as restful as the deepest, unremembering sleep, dark as the empty space around this spinning planet, as a black star.” In the fifth paragraph he says, “The young woman is patient and calm like a loving mother.” Both of these similes are equipped with such diction that their utterance leaves the reader with a subtle sense of depth and meaning.
“Intelligence in the Internet Age”
In “Intelligence in the Internet Age”, Stefani Olsen delivers an analytical and questioning tone mainly result of allusions. The first paragraph is an anecdote about how a Greek philosopher viewed the emergence of written language as the dumbing down of people. Paragraphs four and five were also consumed with an analogy comparing how an obviously intelligent modern day economist would not do so well in the 1950’s where different knowledge was needed. These devices along with the rest of the essay discuss analytically what exactly makes intelligence.
Colby Sargent
IDEAS
Dear Colby,
DeleteYour analyses of the three passages were all great because you were able to find rhetorical strategies that others could not. I generally dont notice similes or allusions the first time i read a passage unless im solely looking for them so you did a good job finding them in each passage. The strategies you found are also perfect for exaplaining the tone of each passage.
Sincerely,
Mason Schwarze
Dear Colby,
DeleteYou analysis of the tone of the passage "Real Women Real Beauty" is exactly the way that I interpreted the passage. though I did nit use the same quotes as you I can agree that certain word choices and phrases that Moana Uluave uses make you feel bitter towards the misconceived idea of beauty that she paints most of the world as having. The fact that we didn't have the same quote exemplifies tat it was very abundant and a powerful tone through out her passage.
Sincerely,
Wylie Barker
IDEAS
Tone
ReplyDeleteIn the passage “Intelligence in the Internet age”, the author Stefanie Olson seems to be quite curious, but at the same time very knowledgeable and informative. She asks “Is technology making us smarter?” but then in the proceeding paragraphs she goes on to explain her opinions as well as statements from other respected sources. Aside from this I also felt as if Stefanie Olson was giving off a slightly sarcastic tone. My reason being, that in the final paragraphs she says “A master painter? Probably not so good at balancing a checkbook.”
In the passage “Real women, real beauty”, Moana Uluave does an excellent job of conveying her exact emotions towards societies perceptions of beauty. While reading this passage I could sense some distain towards the worlds “accepted” definition of beauty. For example when she says “Yes society creates standards for beauty but that doesn’t mean I accept them blindly”. I also think that Moana had a tone of empowerment and confidence. I thought this because of a few things she said such as “There is a difference between my forty dollar shoes and my individual worth”.
In the passage “Pride” Dagoberto Gilb has a very sentimental tone, and like the title of the passage suggests, he also seems to be very proud of his life and latino heritage and culture. The author’s use of Spanish words helps to create a proud tone because it shows that he is not ashamed of the fact that he knows Spanish and uses it regularly. An example that gave a clue to what his tone is was when he said “It is brown. Brown like the skin is brown. Beautiful brown.” This sentence implies that he is proud of the fact that he is dark skinned and embraces it whole heartedly.
Autumn Begley
Hopes Academy
Dear Autumn,
DeleteI agree with the three tones that you chose to describe the three articles. I think you did a great job while describing " Real Women, Real Beauty" in saying that she had a sense of confidence in her tone, it shows that you recognized how she got past the tabloids and realized her sense of "Beauty".
Sincerely,
Haylei Sheldon
IDEAS
Dear Autumn,
DeleteI agree with what you said about "Intelligence in the Internet Age". She definitely uses a sarcastic and questioning tone to get her point across.
Sincerely, Elise McDonald
Dear Autumn,
DeleteI agree with all of the tones you put in the all of your articles. I think you did really great with the "intelligence in the internet age". As the author gives a questioning tone to give the point across this passage. Good job this week, keep up the good work!
Respectfully
Kristian Sablay
Dear Autumn,
DeleteI thought that your response about this article was admirable. Reading "real women real beauty" further expanded my knowledge of self worth and how important it is. I noticed how you incorporated some of the writing rhetorical strategies in your response which made me do the-same on my response. However, I want to know, which one was your favorite essay to analyze?
John Ortega
HOPES
Dear Autumn,
DeleteI dont quite see how Olsen is curious in "intelligence in the internet age". Curious implies being eager to really know the answer to. I feel Olsen isnt wanting the answer as of more leaving the question out there. However i agree with what you said about her sarcastic tone. That was something i didnt quite pick up until you stated it. Good job :)
Sincerely,
Naea Oda
Dear Autumn,
DeleteI completely agree with what you said about the tone of the article "Real Women, real beauty". I could sense the disapproval of societies perception of beauty as well in Uluave's article. I also completely agree with the type of tone you thought was given as well.
Sincerely,
Malia Hickey
In “Real Women, Real Beauty” by Moana Uluave, the tone she definitely uses is a confident tone. She stresses how important it is for women to know that they don’t need material objects, such as makeup, to make them beautiful. She says that she is guilty to thinking this several times though, but she came to the conclusion that intelligence is far more rewarding than beauty.
ReplyDeleteIn “Pride” by Dagoberto Gilb, the tone he uses is gratitude to express his feelings toward pride. He shows us what it means to be a proud man. He talks about small things that give people a sense of pride, and how they are appreciative of it. This gives reader a new perspective on how to see their life and not how others see it. Gilb uses personification to give the reader that sense of image in their head about pride.
Lastly, in “Intelligence in the Internet Age” by Stefani Olson, her tone is inquisitive and urgent, saying are we really going to let technology take over our lives? We need to stop it. Her article is mainly focused around two questions that she presents in the second paragraph: “Is technology making us smarter? Or are we lazily reliant on computers, and, well, dumber than we used to be?”. She doesn’t really disagree or agree with either of the two, but rather questions which is right or wrong. She is urging us to not stop using our memory for intelligence, and to stop relying on technology.
Elise McDonald
IDEAS
Dear Elise,
DeleteTo be honest I didn't really think about urgent, but now that I think about it, it totally fits. I liked the references you gave and how you specified how she is urges us to stop relying on technology. Great essay, I really enjoyed it.
Sincerely,
Amanda Thayer
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ReplyDeleteIn “Pride” Dagoberto Glib’s tone is for the most part, inspirational. In his writing, Glib tries to explain what pride is to him and teach the reader that everyone should have pride. Glib personifies pride when he says “Pride smells a sweet, musky drizzle of rain and eats huevos con chile in corn tortillas heated on a cast-iron pan.” Glib’s use of inspiring examples makes his tone clear and present throughout the entire piece.
ReplyDeleteIn “Real Women, Real Beauty” Moana Uluave’s tone changes throughout the piece. At the beginning, Uluave’s tone is sarcastic and critical. She criticizes people and magazines for their perception of beauty. As the piece moves on, her tone shifts. Her tone then becomes defiant and proudful. She uses this prideful tone when she spoke about her “raving” in her “Tongan beauty.” Uluave’s piece is about her transition from believing in traditional beauty to accepting herself for who she was and scorning the traditional perception of beauty. Her tone follows suit.
In “Intelligence in the Internet Age” Stefanie Olsen keeps a mundane tone. But she shouldn’t have a very harsh tone, for she is teaching the reader about modern intelligence rather than trying to convince the reader of something. She keeps her piece light and informative. Olsen’s purpose of this piece is to inform the reader broaden our understanding of intelligence in the internet age.
Matthew Steinohrt
IDEAS
Dear Matthew,
DeleteI didn't think that the tone of "Pride" was inspirational, but after reading your post and going back I think part of it could be. Thank you for helping me see the passage in a different light. It is always interesting to see something for another persons point of view.
Sincerely,
Victor Sanchez
“Pride” by Dagoberto Gilb has not only an obviously sense of pride (of course), but also a sense of love and appreciation for his town and a strong feeling of understanding. I get the feeling of understanding because Gilb describes everything in a metaphor or a simile and a great amount of detail and you can’t really do that unless you really KNOW your town. In the second paragraph he talks about a “good man, gray on the edges... washing the glass windows of the store, lit up by as many watts as Venus, with a roll of paper towels and the blue liquid from a spray bottle.” Someone who didn’t understand that man of his town, someone who wasn’t proud and didn’t love where they were from, would talk about that simple (probably insignificant man) as just some guy who was washing windows. “Pride is the fearless reaction to disrespect and disregard.” That’s where I mostly felt the sense of love and appreciation toward where Gilb is from because, as it says in that sentence, he isn’t afraid to stand up for the place he came from.
ReplyDeleteThe tone of “Real Women, Real Beauty” by Moana Uluave has a great sense of confidence. She says, “I... saw for the first time the beauty in my Tonganess.” She saw beauty not just in her Tonganess, but in her face, in her skin tone, her hair, her eye color. HERSELF. “I’m going to rave in the beauty of Tonga that ripples across my demeanor and declares my heritage. Uluave is very proud of who she is and she has confidence and that no one can cover up.
I see the tone of “Intelligence in the Internet Age” by Stefanie Olsen as very inquisitive. In the second paragraph she asks, “Is technology making us smarter? Or are we lazily reliant on computers, and, well, dumber than we used to be.” I think the sense of inquisition is rather obvious in this passage because of all the questions Olsen asks throughout the passage. She makes the reader wonder, “Is technology making us stupid or not?”
Erica Cabalona
IDEAS Academy
Dear Erica,
DeleteI 100% agree with you on the "Real Women, Real Beauty" passage. Throughout her essay I found her using confidence and I like how you put how she's proud of herself at the end. Great job on the essay, especially the pride one. I like it.
Sincerely,
Amanda Thayer
Dear Erica,
DeleteI agree that the tone of "Intelligence in the internet age" is Inquisitive, because of all the questions she asked us in the passage. I also agree with you on how Olsen makes us wonder if technology is making us stupid or not. Overall, good analysis and good job!
Sincerely,
Aaryn Gray
Dear Erica,
DeleteReading your paragraph made me understand "Pride" a lot more. When I first read the passage I completely didn't like it, not because I don't believe in pride, but because I didn't get how all of the stories and details related to each other. It just seemed like multiple instances of pride, but your paragraph helped me understand the bigger picture and the clues to look for
Sincerely,
Jenna Stone
Dear Erica,
DeleteAfter reading your thoughts about "Pride" I had a much better understanding of the passage. How the man was proud of people and places that others would usually see as unimportant. You also hit on the love and appreciation you felt during the passage rather than just the obvious "pride". Good job1
Sincerely, Megan Devin
The tone of "Pride" by Dagoberto Gilb, is one of pride and love. For his son, job, house, his life and his heritage. The author uses metaphor, and anaphora to convey his pride and love, "Pride is working a job like it’s as important as art or war, is the happiness of a new high score on a video arcade game, of a pretty new black dress and shoes. Pride is the deaf and blind confidence of the good people who are too poor but don’t notice." by repeatedly defining pride he displayed his own pride for what he does. Some of the syntax is enough to should his pride. "when his son walks to the stage to get his high school diploma and his dad wants to scream his name" Someone who wasn't proud of his son would't write a sentence like that.
ReplyDelete"Real Women, Real Beauty" by Moana Uluave has a tone that is confidant, mature, and proud. "I want to be comfortable in my own skin. And I’m going to rave in the beauty of Tonga that ripples across my demeanor and declares my heritage." The diction in this passage lets the reader feel how proud she is that she is Tongan. The author also uses antithesis to show how she a matured over the years going for not wanting to be Tongan to loving that she is.
"Intelligence in the Internet age"by Stefanie Olsen has a tone that to me sounds questioning. The author is questioning whether what he are doing really equates to intelligence. She ask question like, "Does that mean he's not as bright as an economist from the 1950s? Is he smarter?" about economist for two different eras preforming the same job, but is one smarter than the other? It is questions like this that make the authors tone seem questioning. She wants people to think about if technology is making us smarter. To do this she adopts a tone that make us think.
Victor Sanchez
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Dear Victor,
DeleteAfter reading "Intelligence in the Internet Age" I couldn't clearly find a tone. However after reading your paragraph on it, I now see the true tone of that piece. Also, wonderful examples!
Sincerely,
Matthew Steinohrt
In “Real Women, Real Beauty” by Moana Uluave, the tone she uses is confidence. I noticed this when I read the sentence, “There is a difference between my forty dollar shoes and my individual worth" and “I... saw for the first time the beauty in my Tonganess.” It's shows how she is becoming confident in her heritage.
ReplyDeleteIn "Intelligence in the Internet age" by Stefanie Olsen has a tone of questioning. In the fourth and sixth paragraph where she says, "What makes us intelligent--the ability to reason and learn.." Right here she's questioning what really makes us "intelligent". On the other hand, in the 6th paragraph when she asks, "Does that mean he's not as bright as an economist from the 1950s? Is he smarter?" I think it's rather obvious that she uses questioning throughout the entire essay.
In Gilb’s “Pride” one can sense pride and humility. With his use of descriptive imagery of a corner in El Paso, Gilb sets up a positive connotation of pride. While there are many beneficial aspects to pride, there are also negatives. Pride, being one of the Seven Deadly Sins, obviously has thin line between humility and arrogance. At times the off-putting aspects will shine more than the positive. Gilb writes that there are many ways to gain a sense of pride, such as previous generations of family or even a future generation graduating from high school. When one has a positive sense of pride, one feels a sense of confidence and ambition. “Pride is the deaf and blind confidence of the good people who are too poor but don’t notice”. The reader can obtain a sense of humility from this statement alone. What the writer means is that, even though one might be poor, he does not let it get to his heart.
Amanda Thayer
Hopes Academy
Dear Amanda,
DeleteI thought the way you interpreted the tone of Olsen's passage interesting, I didn't think of that when I was writing the blog. Good job!
Sincerely,
Jenna Stone
Dear Amanda,
DeleteThe way you described the tone of "pride" was very effective. I loved how you said say things like "positive connotation", "one of the Seven Deadly Sins", etc. Your use of words and manipulating them makes your response stronger. I also agree with the tone of the passage. Good job :)
Sincerely,
Naea Oda
The passages 'Real Women, Real Beauty' by Moana Uluave, 'Pride' by Dagoberto Gilb, and 'Intelligence in the Internet Age' by Stefanie Olsen each have their own tones that are influenced by multiple factors including diction and syntax.
ReplyDeleteIn the passage 'Real Women, Real Beauty' by Moana Uluave a sense of progression is conveyed. Not only does the author's opinion in her story change, but the way her article is written changes as well. In the beginning of the passage Uluave uses more simple diction as she describes her early feelings of envy for the girls and women who are naturally "beautiful" by popular definition. However, more towards the end of the passage you can feel the author's strength in her word choices and syntax. For example, the way the author isolates "Just Reality" at the end of the eigth paragraph emphasizes it, the reality of the beauty which the author claims to be legitimate. Also, in the tenth paragraph the author says "I decide the definition of beauty, the definition does not decide me". This shows a very clear change in the author from a pre-teen hiding her face to what she is now.
The passage 'Pride' by Dagoberto Gilb carries an almost sad tone to imply the message. The content until the parts about the father having "tears in his eyes" may not be very sad, but the entire passage makes you feel somewhat sad as you read it. This is partly due to the author's use of syntax in the way he begins his sentences the same way. For example: "A good man", "A plump young woman", and "A son". The way the author manipulates syntax builds a "sad" tone.
The tone of the passage 'Intelligence in the internet age' by Stefanie Olsen is questioning. Questioning not just the reader but reality itself through the use of rhetorical questions. For example, "But the age old qestion remains: Is technology making us smarter?" is one rhetorical question that is directed at more than just the reader. The many rhetorical questions in the passage such as this one lead to a questioning tone.
All three passages have their own unique tone. Tones can range from joyful to angrily aggressive and are influenced by the author's use of rhetorical strategies, primarily diction and syntax.
Mason Schwarze
IDEAS
In the passage “Intelligence in the Internet Age” by Stefanie Olsen, the author’s tone could be described as informative and defensive. The author is making a point that technology has not made us lazy as a lot of people think. She defends this opinion by giving many examples that support her opinion. One example from the passage is “Does that mean that he’s not as bright as an economist from the 1950’s? Is he smarter? The answer is probably “no” on both counts.” She gives an example that supports her opinion, which is defending it. The author then informs the readers that instead of people getting less intelligent, they are trading certain skills for others, and the skills that were important earlier in history are not as important now. That is how it informs the readers as well.
ReplyDeleteIn the passage Real Women, Real Beauty by Moana Uluave, the tone in the beginning is shameful. Uluave describes the time when she was younger and ashamed of the way she looked. She said she was ashamed that she didn’t “possess the “correct” qualities” that society liked. After explaining the way the felt after being influenced by others and sources around her, she shifts the tone of the passage to confident. She writes that she realized that beauty is on the inside, and she doesn’t mind that she doesn’t possess the qualities fashion magazines advertise. She is proud and happy being Togan and having those physical features make her confident in herself.
The tone of the passage “Pride” by Dagoberto Glib is, of course, pride. He gives examples of what it is to have pride, including “pride is working a job like it’s as important as art or war.” Glib is stating that no matter who you are, you should always have pride in yourself and the things you do. Even the small things should be admired because they are things that you did or are a part of. That is what Dagoberto Glib is stating in the passage “Pride”.
Jenna Stone
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Dear Jenna,
DeleteI admired the way you efficiently identified the tone in each passage. I felt like I could read your response without difficulty to understand. I also put the same tones as you for "Real Women, Real Beauty" and "Pride" but in the other one I got a different tone although I can clearly see how you could get the tone of informative in Olsenʻs passage. Overall great response.
From,
Marina Mireles
Sincerely,
Tone
ReplyDeleteUluave’s tone throughout “Real Women, Real Beauty” is very confident. By using allusion with the vogue magazine she helps convey what the world sees as “Real Beauty”. This shows that Uluave was very confident with herself that she didn’t have to be or look like a model to feel pretty about herself. The author also states “There is a difference between my forty dollar shoes and my individual worth”. This also backs up the fact that she is very confident.
For the passage “Intelligence in the Internet Age” Stephanie Olson to me has a slight sarcastic tone. . When giving her opinion about technology she was able to back it up using her knowledge. By also using the respected sites she was able to add more information to inform the reader. What drew me into thinking this piece held a little sarcastic tone was “A master painter? Probably not so good at balancing a checkbook.” This passage also had a very informational tone where she was trying to get her point across about the internet.
With the passage “Pride” Gilb defines pride by using a connection that he is proud of, which is his heritage and who he is as a person. He uses his own language of spanish in his writing to intensify his pride of his heritage. He also conveys his pride through his skin color when stating that his brown skin is beautiful. This magnifies the fact of his pride within his heritage, his skin color, and more importantly himself.
Keisha Aki
HOPES Academy
Keisha,
DeleteGreat job on answering the prompt! We had similar ideas in figuring out the tone of the passages :) I agree with what you wrote about the beauty essay, and I like how you were different than everyone else and stated a different example from the story. I like how you used "There is a difference between my forty dollar shoes and my individual worth" because it's true, and it went well with supporting her confident tone.
-Hazel
To properly present an enjoyable read, authors must set diverse and interesting tones that readers can relate to. We can all agree that the tone of the author is what hooks the reader to continue and traverse through phenomenal choice of dialects. True authors make each phrase radiate with colorful light that produces a more sophisticated tone.
ReplyDelete“Intelligence in the internet age” questions the reader by ways of allusion, flashbacking the reader back and forth from the present to the future. Using examples of renowned people such as Aeschylus to inform the reader that this person did not require multiple set of technological advances to perform his daily routine but in fact breezed through these tasks without the assistance of such items. Olsen’s interrogative tone really questions the reader if they are truly knowledgeable. Without electronics like computers and programs like excel and Microsoft word, can the human race really manage to pull off a sufficient work worthy of praise?
In Uluave’s “Real women real beauty” I noticed that she had a very positive and optimistic tone. She references formidable sources that validate her point. Although it was distressing at first, she gradually shifts her tone to please the reader.
Uluave Discussed how magazines portray only flawless women that society approves but cannot nearly be compared to the average citizen. She suggests that these advertisements made her feel insecure at some point in her life and made her resent her life blemishes. Her tone then started to change to aesthetically please the reader using personal experience, combined with genuine and humble emotions to greatly express how crucial beauty from the inside is. She illuminates the reader’s mind by culminating aspects of her views proving that she had accepted her Tongan features.
In “Pride” Gilb initially used very descriptive tones to help the reader picture very vivid images. The tone was in fact proud. The author used several anecdotes to convince the reader that he was proud of his Latino heritage. That the superficial stereotypes did not all affect him and his family. This whole passage was heartwarming to read because I accumulated several subliminal messages hidden in the sentences made me the reader more accepting of myself and who I truly am.
John Ortega
HOPES
John,
DeleteGreat job on your response, don't think you had to include an introduction paragraph, but it really ties your piece together. If it was required, it'd have been perfect. I agree with your identification on Uluave's outlook of beauty. She was very positive, however she was also defensive. Remember the key details!
--Other John :D
John,
DeleteI like the way you incorporate so much thought into your responses. It adds in more of yourself into your writing, giving your piece some personality. Anyways, great job on answering the prompt. We had similar ideas in trying to figure out the tone of the passages :)
-Hazel
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ReplyDeleteIn the passage “Intelligence in the Internet Age”, Stefanie Olsen uses her tone to express her feelings on the innovation happening in the world over time, and its applications on peoples lives. Olsen makes the point “Is technology making us smarter? Or are we lazily reliant on computers, and, well, dumber than we used to be?” By mentioning this, she stumbled upon an ongoing debate on whether or not technology is good for us as a productive use of our time. Her tone expresses concern for the loss of the human genius and intuition to invent advanced technology such as phones and computers. If everyone is dumbed down by the “lazy reliance” on computers, no one will be smart anymore, not utilizing their memories and thought processes as much as they should be
ReplyDeleteIn Moana Uluave’s “Real Women, Real Beauty”, she gives off a light tone of defensive self-recognition. Many people disgrace her outward appearance, but she knows that she is beautiful on the inside, in her personality and actions. She claims that it is unfair for tabloids to say she and the rest of her heritage is not beautiful because they do not possess the natural qualities of “beauty”. In the tabloids’ perspective, straight hair and white skin is considered beautiful. Uluave counters this judgement unfair, because she loves her heritage and considers her and her fellow sistren to be beautiful as well.
Dagoberto Gilb writes of his life in El Paso in the passage “Pride”, his home being on the edge of Mexico, bordering the US State of New Mexico. Gilb expresses his tone through a sense of pride, as the title tells, without any sense of regret or shame. By giving multiple definitions of his opinion of pride, he shows how he sees his life situation, and he’s proud of it. “Pride is the fearless reaction to disrespect and disregard. It is knowing that the future will prove that wrong.”
In the passage "Pride", Dagoberto Gilb defines what its like to have pride, in events such as taking pride in your work and doing a good job to having pride in your ethnicity. He describes all different types of pride while having a sort of hidden definition of pride. He describes his pride in his ethnicity throughout. His tone in this passage is enthusiastic and very proud. You can tell his tone of this passage by what his use of diction. Gilb uses spanish words in his essay which shows that he is proud of his hispanic ethnicity. It is enthusiastic because of the way the passage flows, it is an upbeat reading.
ReplyDeleteIn "Real Women, Real Beauty" the tone of the passage at first is kind of empathetic because she is being influenced by the people around her about her own image. She thought her hair was too thick and frizzy just because some girl told her so. Then thinking she was too dark. She was being shaped by society and pretty much everyone knows what she is going through because we have all been there. Then toward the end of the passage her tone is very proud, happy, and relaxed. Toward the end she realizes that she is truly beautiful. She accepted herself and her Tonganess. She finally saw the beauty within herself and society's definition of beauty is pretty much fake, nonexistent.
In "Intelligence of the Internet Age" the tone of the passage is debating. Stefanie Olsen is debating which is more "intelligent", or rather what the definition of intelligence really was. Whether it was someone who was able to memorize everything they needed, or someone who would turn to a book to find their answer. Olsen also debated between an economist from the 1950s and an economist from modern day. One hand charted while the other used technology. Both have different definitions of intelligence, but nevertheless, both are indeed intelligent.
Naea Oda
Hopes
Dear Naea,
DeleteGreat job on your response! You answered the questions, gave your examples, and supported them. Honestly better than my take away! Nice job distinguishing the essence of fake beauty in "Real Women, Real Beauty". Couldn't say it much better myself.
--John
Tone Analyzation
ReplyDeleteTone is very important to any writer of any kind whether they be an author of a novel, a newspaper article,an obituary, a childrens book or a poem. The writer conveys their tone through diction and many other ways. Examples can be found very easily as long as you know what you are looking for.
In the passage Pride by Dagoberto Gilb, Gilb tone is very serious and passionate yet monotone. You can see that Gilb is passionate through “Pride is the fearless reaction to disrespect and disregard. It is knowing the future will prove that wrong.” You can see that Gilb cares about this topic. Gilb shows a monotone side when at the end the author uses “ It is brown. Brown like the skin is brown. Beautiful brown.” This shows the serious side of Gilb’s argument.
The next passage is Real Women, Real Beauty by Moana Uluave. You can see her wanting to disprove and spite many people who have condescending views of beauty. Also you can see her pain caused by other peoples projection of beauty on her. You can see her pain very clearly in “However, the biting remarks of my past wouldn’t allow me to forget the bitterness of ugliness. This ugliness genetically imposed upon my countenance” Uluave shows through her word choice and diction how deep this pain was and how much it still affects her. Uluave also shows her defiance “So what do i deem worthy of my front page Vogue? My mother and grandmother. Real women without a lick of make-up, dark brown and unruly hair.” Theses few sentences exemplify how Uluave feels and how this may be the exact opposite of what others feel but she doesn’t care.
The last passage that I will identify is the tone is Intelligence in the Internet Age by Stefanie Olsen. You can feel throughout the passage that Olsen's attitude and tone is inquisitive Olsen repeatedly poses questions such as “Is technology making us smarter?” “What makes us intelligent?” and “Does that mean he’s not as bright as an economist from the 1950’s? Is he smarter?” All of theses and many more questions placed strategically throughout the article show that Olsen is searching for an answer and that he himself is not completely sure of whether technology makes us smarter or not until the end of the passage. This sense of curiosity draws the reader in.
Wylie Barker
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In “Real women, Real Beauty” Uluave displays a tone of concern. She is concerned that the media and todays idea of beauty is greatly affecting women. She states that “up to 35 million Americans suffer from some type of eating disorder.” This statement gives fact that there are many people suffering from these disorders and it is a serious problem. She also gives many real life experiences of how she was treated because of her tongan race, and how it affected her. She tells the story of how one of her friends told her that her hair was thick and frizzy. Uluave says she never wore her hair down after that. She can see how it has affected her and she is concerned that it is happening to other girls. She compares the media to Hitler because she feels it is that horrible. The whole story has a sense of urgency that we need to help young girls who are being affected by this. Hse is very concerned because this topic is very personal for her.
ReplyDeleteIn “Intelligence in the Internet Age” Olsen has a very questioning tone. She spends the whole time debating the answer rather than defending one side. She talks about how some would argue that our reliance on technology is making us more stupid, where others would argue that it the other way around. She also talks about how the answer to the question depends on what you consider “Smart” to mean. She states “ A succesful Wall Street banker who has dropped into the australian outback likely couldnt pull off a great crocodile dundee impression. A master painter? probably not so good at balancing a check book” This comparison shows her debating and questioning both sides of the argument.
In “Pride” Gilb carries a very appreciative, or proud tone throughout the passage. He talks about how people are very proud of the small things like a mans job as an assistant manager or a womens new black dress. He urges throughout the passage that these small things in life are what we need to be proud of. He uses example after example to convey this tone to the readers. He also talks about the different ways that pride is expressed and that people should be proud of even a “new highscore on a video game”
Megan Devin
IDEAS
Tone
ReplyDeleteIn “Real Women, Real Beauty”, Moana Uluave sets a tone in sharing what she feels to be the true definition of beautiful. At first, I sensed that Moana was trying to tell the reader how shameful she was of her looks, by the way she said “Then I would cover my face in envy of those who possessed the “correct” qualities.” However, as I read on, I thought of how confident she started to sound. When she says, “Then, I saw for the first time the beauty in my Tonganess”, she clearly lets the reader know how nobody could define the true beauty she sees within herself. Which, leads to her purpose of stating that her definition of beauty isn't based off of the looks, but rather the woman she wants to and has become.
Stefanie Olsen's Intelligence in the Internet Age gets the reader to think. She uses sort of a questioning tone that rails the reader more into the passage. For example, in the second paragraph, she asks, “But the age-old question remains: Is technology making us smarter? Or are we lazily reliant on computers, and well, dumber than we used to be?” She uses this question to make us realize that whoa, we really do rely on computers a lot more, especially when it comes to homework. We get stuck on a question, and depend on google to help us get the answer.
The passage Pride has more of a proud tone. You can tell by the way he incorporates his heritage within the story. He shows that he isn't ashamed of who he is because he uses Spanish words to describe his family, such as mijo, abuelos y abuelitas, and tios and primos. Dagoberto is proud of the person he is, hence the title “Pride.”
Sincerely,
Hazel Jarquio
HOPES
Hazel,
DeleteI thoroughly enjoyed your analysis of each piece of writing. You used diction that makes it simple for any person to understand your point of view. You also effectively employed direct quotation from each passage, along with a clear realization of each tone. Bravo!
Cordially,
Paul Oyama
HOPES
In the passage “Real Women, Real Beauty”, author Moana Uluave make the overall tone was pride. She conveys this in her purpose of how it’s important for people to be who they are rather than what society wants you to be. She say how she realized how she would alway be tongan no matter what. How she says “I want my children to look Tongan and their children and their children’s children.” This explains how she true care and stands tall for her culture a straight example of pride. Also when she states that, “Ironically and fortunately, my definition of beauty cannot be reflected in a mirror.” This conveys her tone in the most direct way explaining how she knew how society saw her and didn’t care about how they see her because she was proud of who she is.
ReplyDelete“Intelligence in the Internet Age” by Stefanie Olsen has a tone of disappointment in this generation. This is conveyed throughout Olsen’s article. An example of this would be she state’s, “ the age-old question remains: Is technology making us smarter? Or are we lazily reliant on computers, and, well, dumber than we used to be?” This completely expresses Olsen’s tone of disappointment by expressing how she feels about the youth and how the easiness of the computer age has caused utter laziness of the generation.
Dagoberto Gilb author of the passage “Pride.” The tone of this passage is gratitude. this is conveyed in the sixth paragraph where it state’s how “Pride... is the happiness of a new high score on a video game.” This, and many other references are good examples of gratitude, for them to be thankful for what they’ve been given.
Noah LaMadrid
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Dear Mr. LaMadrid,
DeleteDespite minor grammatical errors, I denote that your prose was clear and concise. You also brought a unique perspective to these articles, one not shown by our other peers. I appreciate how you were straight to the point, and not skittering around what you were tying to say. I comend you for terrific analysis.
Cordially,
Paul Oyama
HOPES
In “Pride” by Dagoberto Gilb, a sense of consciousness of a man’s surroundings and pride in his life is given. With the descriptive use of imagery like “The young woman is patient and calm like a loving mother”, Gilb is able to convey his message of appreciation for his surroundings. Also, Gilb describes pride and what it means to him through similes such as “Pride hears gritty dirt blowing against an agave whose stiff fertile stalk, so tall, will not bend - the love of land, rugged like the people who live on it.” By using descriptive examples Dagoberto Gilb demonstrates pride and how it feels as well as his appreciation for life, both being the tone conveyed throughout the writing.
ReplyDeleteIn the article written by Moana Uluave “Real Women, Real Beauty”, a tone of self-worth and frustration with society is conveyed throughout the written piece. Using references to magazines and tabloids like “the tabloids’ bold print pulls in every desperate housewife longing for a body like Eva Longoria”, demonstrates her resentment and unhappiness with the messages society is conveying. She also refers to her own personal story and how even her friend judged her looks leaving you with a feeling of disapproval.
In “Intelligence in the Internet age” by Stefanie Olsen the tone that is most obvious in her writing is a questioning tone. She is seems to be curious about whether technology is benefiting us and helping us to become smarter or hurting us. She asks the question “Is technology making us smarter? Or are we lazily reliant on computers”. In addition to that question, Olsen asks many more questioning the strengths of using the internet. Her questioning tone is quite obvious throughout her writing.
Malia Hickey
IDEAS
In the passage Pride by Dagoberto Gilb the tone to the passage is pride and appreciation towards his Latino heritage family and job. In the passage Gilb defines pride as working a job like its important as art or war. He uses Spanish words to tell the readers that his Latino. In the passage Gilb talks about appreciating everything and being proud for the things you do and have. When his son graduated he was so proud he had tears.
ReplyDeleteThe tone in Real women, real beauty by moana uluave, is acceptance. Growing up moana was insecure about her Tongan appearance. She says that she wants to remove everything that made her Tongan. "My tonganess, my inheritance" that's when she began to accept who she is. She stated" I recognized beautiful Pacific Islander young women stripping themselves of their inherited ethnic characteristics and eagerly adopting to the majority ideals of beauty.
In "Intelligence in the internet age" by stefanie Olsen her tone is inquisitive. She ask readers many questions to make them wonder whether technology is making us smarter or dumber. She questions " Is technology making us smarter? Or are we lazily reliant on computer, and, well dumber than we used to be?
Sincerely
Zhaira Agrade
Hopes
In Pride, Dagoberto Glib eloquently displays his tone with ease. The tone, ironically, is in fact pride. He expresses his love and admiration for his Latin heritage. His use of the Spanish language displays the fact that he has no shame and that he embraces his upbringing, a feat in and of itself especially with how kids these days tend to be ashamed of being different from their friends. Glib truly shows how much his heritage means to him, in particular when he describes the land as "...brown. A beautiful brown".
ReplyDeleteIn Real Women, Real Beauty, Moana Uluave also shows a sense of pride. But this is a bit different from Glib. She shows pride in herself, and she tells of a time when she really struggled to do so. She manages to accept the fact that she's not a "Vogue" girl, but rather a Tongan who is 100% comfortable in her own skin. Throughout the passage, Uluave uses her personal struggle to convey her feelings. She also displays her transformation from unhappy girl to a confident young woman ready to take the world by storm.
In Intelligence in the Internet Age, Stefanie Olsen deconstructs the current generation's idea of "intelligence". She does this through a somewhat dry tone. Olsen uses very little expression and just seems to be a bit dreary while writing this piece. She also gives a bit of attitude when disproving what some people believe to be intelligence. She is also inquisitive, due to the fact that she tells of the opposing viewpoints on actual intelligence, yet never gives her definitive opinion. She leaves the piece open, which is part of the reason it's so effective.
Paul Oyama
HOPES Academy
“Real Women, Real Beauty”
ReplyDeleteIn this passage, author Moana Uluave has an extremely bold but somewhat sorrow tone. She starts out her essay discussing how the media has taken control of the worlds definition of beauty and then reminisces back to her childhood explaining the events that made her timid and ashamed of her Tongan culture. Uluave goes on with these events until the point of where she reached that moment where she felt comfortable in her own skin, shifting from a sorrow and pity tone to a bold and smooth one. At the end of her passage, she realizes that she should not let the media define her and that she wants to carry on the message of embracing her culture to her future children.
“Pride”
Dalgoberto Gilb creates a smooth and flowing tone as he starts out his passage by describing the place where he manages. The way in which Gilb goes on to illustrate his view on his job entices a prideful tone, showing that even though heʻs not a millionaire, he still puts hard work into his job at the gas station. From there, Gilb reaches back to his childhood days, exploiting that he is Latino by using Spanish words and incorporating Latino Cultures. All of these components together turn his tone prideful. Not prideful as in cocky but prideful as in not ashamed of his Latino heritage.
“Intelligence in the Internet Age”
Right off the bat, the tone of inquisition from author Stefanie Olsen is obvious. She starts off her passage by using questions to get the readers thinking about her purpose; which is ultimately to wonder if the internet is hurting us/slowing our intelligence down or boosting out levels of intelligence and making us stronger human beings. As the reader continues in her passage, one can almost get the tone of defeat or disappointment as she expresses that this generation has gotten lazy because of the internet.
Marina Mireles
HOPES
The three passages that were presented to us each carried a distinctive tone in them, each tone was used to convey the message that was present in the piece. For example, the passage “Intelligence in the internet age”, which continually cited questions and contradictory statements to the reader while using allusions to the distant past. The tone obviously being one who questions whether the internet, and its vast wealth of freely available knowledge, has made humanity more intelligent, or less so. Olsen goes into further depth regarding these difference of opinion by citing the ancient greeks and how their were different opinions regarding the newly developed writing system and how it could degrade their peoples adeptness as language. It’s hard to imagine a world without the written word, just like the next generation will likely be unable to comprehend a world without the internet. Olsen continues to say that “intelligence” is simply a persons ability to use the tools provided to them, so while an average working man in the 70’s might have been far more talented in his book-keeping at his job, he would lack in the technical department, where as a 21st century man would be far more talented with a computer and skills that relate to such, so each one possesses “intelligence” but in different ways. But Olsen goes even further to question that in itself. In short, the passage has an inquisitive tone and makes heavy use of allusions to make the reader question his or her own opinions of intelligence.
ReplyDeleteThe next passage, “Real women, Real Beauty” is one who continually speaks in a tone that that grabs the readers attention, and not always in a good way. It’s safe to say that it means to shove its opinion down your throat, so it can be inferred that its an informative passage. Uluave uses shocking and attention grabbing statements throughout the entirety of the passage, such as when she compares the media to Hitler, which frankly, in my opinion, is not necessary in the slightest. The author further goes into suicide rates and their relation to said media and how it presents the “Ideal woman” in such a way that’s impossible, or at least extremely difficult and physically tormenting, for an average woman to achieve. The tone of the essay is obviously a shocking and intention grabbing one, and considering the rate it goes into her own opinion, it’s likely to inform the reader of it.
The final passage, “Pride” is a passage that has a tone that is very fitting, considering its namesake. Gilb uses powerful imagery to show the reader several people experiencing pride during important moments in their lives. The author goes into detail about how pride feels and how it is difficult to describe due to its subjective nature and how each person can experience it in a vastly different way than another. He also presents Pride in a positive light, rather than the usually negative way it is presented due to certain beliefs regarding it. Gilb takes Pride in Pride, and thusly his tone is filled with appreciation for the skills or accomplishments one can do on their own.
Ryemin Liddle
HOPES Academy
In “Pride” by Dagoberto Gilb, Gilb describes what it is like to have pride in a very passionate yet serious tone. Gilb says, “Pride is the deaf and blind confidence of the good people who are too poor but don’t notice.” This is a very powerful sentence because it shows that everybody can be proud of something even if they don’t have much to be proud of.
ReplyDeleteIn “Real Women Real Beauty” by Moana Uluave, Uluave describes her experience of being of Tongan blood growing up in Salt Lake City. The tone of this passage starts out as almost shame in her for being Tongan because all of the tabloids that basically describe her as unacceptable beauty wise. Uluave says, “I would avoid mirrors knowing I’d see an image of which the world and I disapproved.” Then in the fifth paragraph of the passage the tone switches to pried in her Tonganess because it is her inheritance and there is nothing that she can do to change that. She is proud of where she descends from. Uluave says, “My mother and grandmothers. Real women without a lick of make-up, dark brown skin, unruly hair.”
In “Intelligence in the Internet age” by Stefanie Olsen, Olsen leaves the readers pondering two questions. “Is technology making us smarter? Or are we lazily reliant on computers, and, well, dumber than we used to be?” Throughout the entire passage, she gives circumstances supporting both sides of the argument but leaves it up to the reader to decide for themselves what they think technology is doing for us in the modern day world.
Kai Harrison
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The tone that is presented in Moana Uluave “Real Women, Real beauty” is of self acceptance. In the beginning of the article Uluave discusses about how she defined beauty, as being fair skinned, thin, and straight hair. She also uses her moms definition of beauty, which is intelligence is beautiful. On paragraph 6, Uluave uses Hitler to convey the tone, saying that millions of people died because they didn't have the “correct” qualities. As you get deeper into you see that her definition of beauty has changed, Uluave describes beauty as a who knows where her roots are. In the closing of her article Uluave talks about how herself and her future kids never forget where they come from.
ReplyDeleteThe tone that is shown in Dagoberto Gilb's passage “Pride” is pride. Gilb expresses his love for his hispanic roots using spanish words, imagery, and anaphora. A specific example of imagery is in the last paragraph, “look out from the height of the mountain and in front of and after the Rio Grande, to the so far away and so close, the so many more of fuzz on the wide horizon”. An example of anaphora in paragraph 8,”Pride hears gritty dirt blowing against an agave whose stiff fertile stalk, so tall, will not bend---the love of land, rugged like the people who live on it. Pride sees the sunlight on the Franklin Mountains in the first light of morning and listens to the neighbor’s gallo---the love of culture and history.Pride smells a sweet, musky drizzle of rain and eats huevos con chile in corn tortillas heated on a cast iron pan---the love of heritage”.
The tone in Stefanie Olsen “Intelligence in the internet age” is inquisitive.Olsen uses a lot of references from the past, for example, she uses a reference from a greek philosopher a few thousand years ago, she compares a modern economists with an economist from 40 years aos, and quotes Robert Sternberg, a professor at Tufts University.
Camilla Vernon
HOPES
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ReplyDeleteIn Dagoberto Gilb’s Pride he explains in his purpose that you should be prideful in important times of your life. Gilb refers to pride as “.. is working a job like it’s as important as art or war..”. Meaning that using or feeling pride in the right way will be like appreciating art for it’s inner beauty. Though when pride is being used wrong or you feel pride in a situation that you shouldn’t feel pride in is like war where each side is too stubborn admit their in the wrong.
ReplyDeleteFor Intelligence in the Internet age by Stefanie Olsen with it’s purpose being that technology has helped increase our knowledge not only for ourselves but our surroundings. In Olsen’s words “Our environment, because of technology, is changing, and therefore the abilities we need in order to navigate these highly information-laden environments and succeed are changing”. With that it basically means that our environment is evolving and following that our mind expands with new knowledge. Olsen’s use of ethos with Diego Valderrama an economist with the Federal Reserve Bank in San Francisco. The C++ programming language helped him with his knowledge and created mathematical algorithms to compute answers and produce elaborate projections.
Real Women, Real Beauty by Moana Uluave purpose is to not care about your outer beauty, but to love your inner beauty because that’s what matters. Uluave used pathos to explain her tone and purpose. For she starts out by saying that she is ugly and then transitions to her not caring and with Uluave use of syntax it helps convince readers to not listen to others opinion about their looks. What helped Uluave realise that she should embrace her inner beauty is her ‘AHA’ moment and said “Whatever it was I realized--I wanted to remove everything that made me Tongan”. That moment proved to her that listening to magazines on what beauty should look like made her forget her inner beauty, her inheritance, her tonganess.
Kassandra Iloreta
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